Learning Outcome: Revision

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Artifacts: Final Draft, Pre Submission Project 1 Peer Review

 This outcome, if I were to put it in my own words is essentially "can you take advice from others, along with your own thoughts, and improve your work". Now I will say that I always have been and still am terrible at that. Out of all of the outcomes this is probably the one I dislike the most. Fortunately, I did not have to deal with it a ton in this course. Some of the few instances I did have to deal with it were in the artifacts I choose. I choose them because they represent two different situations, one where feedback from other didn't really change my work and one where it did. If you go read the Pre Submission Project 1 Peer review, all of writing I did as for what I needed to do for my project 1 were made after discussing with fellow classmates.​ Now in regard to that discussion I think I can say I don't remember it affecting what I wrote barely at all. I went into that discussion with almost all of the same ideas I came out with. There just wasn't anything that convinced me I needed to revise my ideas, which does go with the outcome. If there's no need to revise, then don't revise. This this is nowhere near what happened with the final paper. When I got feedback for my other draft, my professor basically that the majority of my introduction was bad and reading it back I kind of realized why. This is because when I wrote in the beginning I didn't know what the rest of my paper would look like, So I just threw all of my ideas on the page, hypothesis and all. What ended up happening was that it sounded like I was saying something I did not mean to say, which did not fit with other parts of my paper. I was also advised to bring in another source. So, after that I just revised. I rethought what I wanted my introduction to look like, brought in and integrated the source, and overall reframed my argument. Fortunately, I did not have to change much else with the rest of the paper. Now, even with that being said, as of writing this my paper has not been graded and so I have no idea whether my revisions are actually good or not. The thing is that I have never been good with revision and may very well never be good with revision. Still, up until this point I have not revised to this level and with writing like that I have done for this course. So, I think I can at least say I have learned a little for this outcome. I may have to revise more writing in the future, and if that happens, then hopefully I have at least gotten better by that time.